I have received formal feedback from my tutor for my third assignment ‘The Decisive Moment’. Considering this particular assignment took a long time to complete due to personal situations, I am happy with the response I got.

Here is a summary of the comments received via email:

Strengths:

– Strong interpretation of the ‘ongoing’ (in)decisive moment through the representation of time in the still life flower.
– Using the domestic setting shows a strategic conceptual documentation of the private and quotidian, rather than the public realm of most decisive work.
– Good references about technical approaches.
– Explores the technical/conceptual and how it alludes to still life.

Weaknesses:

– Define critical terms right away concisely with a firmer introduction to the assignment.
– Show the subject, presentation and give context to the approach, so tell them rather than let them find out themselves.
– Link what I’ve found via references but be clear on the subject to start with.
– Expand my points further with ‘whys’ with references to show how I’ve done something.

Areas of development:

– Attach annotated contact sheets to show how I got to a certain technical decision etc.
– Explain concept initially and expand later one in more detail.
– Lead reader into the subject and reference my evidence to back it up.
– Reference influences and how I interpreted the assignment.

Reflection:

Once again, I need to work on being more concise but avoid being too vague by referencing and explaining my approaches in more detail. Write about what’s relevant and the influences I used within my own work is important. I need to lead my readers into the subject and further expand with evidence at a later point. Overall, I have the ideas there and the strong images to show that I’ve understood the assignment, however, my written work needs to be clearer and reflect exactly what I discovered. They’ve noted that it’s difficult to do, but worth getting the hang of early on.